Some good stuff there DSC, but I think you ned a little more originality in your plot. All you've really done for the most part is adapt parts of the book (Not that there's anything wrong with that).
Originally posted by Don Sonny Corleone:
MIKE: ...I will always be a Corleone, but I will never be an olive oil importer.
Sound exactly like what Anthony said to Michael in GF III.
I will always be your son. But I will never have anything to do with your business.
