Double J.....as a writer and observer....I can tell a great deal about a person by their writing style and structure. It's what I do for a living.

When I am asked to write a script or storyline, part of my research might include a bit of personal writings from various people and other sources. Being able to interpret what I read is essential to what I may write.

There is nothing wrong with your style. As a matter of fact....I find it most refreshing.

Regards.


P.S.....if you are interested, I could direct you to some wonderful material in terms of becoming a writer.