I finally had the time today to read your episode. It was a decent attempt to mimic The Sopranos - hey, anything's better than what's on now.

For one, I thought Carmella's reaction to Junior's death was out of character. Since season 1, she HATED Junior. I doubt that she would rush to tell Tone that he's dead. She'd probably wait till morning, and sip some wine in relief.

Secondly, it was short. When you write dialogue, put it on a separate line. Also, many times you would not actually write what the person was saying, but a description. It is much better to actually write it out. Finally, The Sopranos is about a 50 minute show. That would translate to about 50 pages in a screenplay, with the proper format.

But, like I said, its good. Sorry if I'm nit-picking; a lot of people really do not have the time to write a proper script.