Originally posted by Enzo Scifo:
Well, it's not bad, but I have the feeling you are trying to imitate Puzo too much.
Plus, you should include some dialogue.
Well, I tried not to imitate Puzo but it seemed to develop by itself! haha I wanted to write a trailer, some short story which would be written at the back of a book, a DVD box so it couldn`t have a script or dialogue. I think it would be more dramatic like this than having written a dialogue.
By the way, Enzo, don`t you want to write one of yours?
