Somewhat of an assignment and too much free time on my hands. Tell me what you think of it.
*CAPS LOCK INDICATED YELLING


Hey Pop, its been awhile. I'm good, and you? Good, good. There just wasnt enough time......there never is. I remember you told me that once. I was young, I actually thought I could change things. I really did want to keep my promise to Kay, and I tried, God knows I tried. But the higher you go, the crookeder it becomes......How did you do it? How did you keep your family together? I wanted Anthony and Mary to grow up in the same environment I did, but worring about Roth, and Ola, Pentangeli, Fredo and Kay, I just couldnt do it. Maybe Kay was right to have that abortion;it woke me up, bit I still....I still cant forgive her. And Fredo,....oh Pop, I'm sorry. I stood there, in that window, and listened to that gunshot ricchochet(sp) around the lake. I ordered the death of my own brother......I ordered the death of your son. I thought about it everyday, though. The only regret I ever had. At the time, it was the only thing I could do. He hurt me, and I knew he'd do it again......(trails off) I paid for my actions too. The children grew up hating me, and I lost my daughter. She was a young girl, smart, with a bright future ahead of her, and she was killed with a bullet that was ment for me. After that, Kay wanted nothing to do with me, Anthony either. I dont blame them though.....GOD DAMNIT! I was so close, every time, so close I could taste it, but they always pulled me back in. One by one, old frineds betreyed us, and our world changed. I had a whole diffrent plan for our lives.......Destiny, right?.....How'd you do it Pop? How'd you keep your family?

Nice!!!!!!!


Don Cardi

Very nice.

Great!

DSC -

Nice job!

My only criticism - I would take out/change the second sentence in which Mike says he is good. (He wasn't, and I don't think he'd lie to his father about that).

again,thats a good read

SC- What do you mean by that? I wrote it as Michael was good because he had died, thus finally getting out of the life. I'm curious to your interpatation.(sp) Thanks for saying something constuctive, unlike the rest. JK Thanks to all who read it.

Ooops.... I didn't see it as that. I saw it as Mike "talking" to his dad as Mike was waiting to die (and reminiscing as an old man).

Anyway, it was nicely done. You said it was an assignment. Let us know how you were graded.

Don Sonny! How wery talented you are...
So they are conversing - at heaven ?
As to constructive, i dare think his children did not grow up to hate him. We know that they "loved him still, especially Mary."
And that they should desert him after Mary's death - i don't think so, but that's just a personal feeling. I thought that misfortune should unit them all at last. They had to feel what pain it was to him, and support him. His son particularly. Kay maybe would not, i allways thought her as mean and selfish as that implies. Sorry for long talking