Hey T C ... i like ur web cool layout n all ,.... i realy like the story 2 it was a cool idea but the language is a bit poor but i like the idea ... also i will contact you myself and give you also a story im writing if u dont mind and u can post it on ur site ... keep up the good work man
Good story idea, but I don't think you tried hard enough.You should work on your sentence structure and vocabulary,and SLOW DOWN abit cause' you seemed to be rushing. This might seem a little nit-picky,but you might try to think of renaming it to.If you revise your story,and study your writing,it will turn out pretty cool.Otherwise,good concept.